"Angry Letter" -Essay Draft

Connie Havest
Jeans Warehouse- Kaneohe
46-056 Kamehameha Highway #A111
Kaneohe, Hawaii 96744

Aloha Connie,

Like a lot of other kids my age, I love to find good clothes, for good prices. Your customer service is friendly, and a great environment to shop in. Without a doubt, I would say your store has been nothing less then satisfying to our needs, yet an incident that occurred earlier this year, had me, as well as others involved, have second thoughts about our interest in your store.

As usual when going to the mall, my two cousins and I always go to Jeans Warehouse, and in Windward Mall, there's not many other places that have our interest, like your store does. On that particular day, we weren't exactly dressy and as usual when we all get together, we were excessively loud, and we usually get discriminated against for that, but never in your store. We had just received money, and had high intentions of spending most of it on clothing. We noticed that your store was recently renovated, and the improvements looked great. Everything was neatly organized, and the cashier desk, was moved to the middle of the store. We walked in casually, pretty much staring in awe of the improvements made, since the last time we shopped. We walked around the store maybe 2 or 3 times, checking out the sales and took some time to decide what we wanted to buy. On our 4th trip around the store, we finally decided to start getting some things. As we came back to the front of the store, beginning to grab some items of the shelves and racks, a worker at the cashier desk, cleared her throat, loud enough for the whole store to hear, and it was an obviously sarcastic "throat clear." As she did this, her as well as another worker gave us a look, as if we were stealing. Their stares causes majority of the long line of customers, paying for their merchandise, to turn around and stare at us with those looks also. As everyone stared at us, we felt embarrassed by the actions of your workers, and felt we were discriminated against perhaps because of our excessive loudness, or the fact that we took so long to find the things we wanted to buy, as if we were "scoping out" the place to steal some of your items. We felt so watched, and hurt by the assumption made by your workers, that we put all of our items back, and left the store.

Since that day, my two cousins and I have sour thoughts about your store, and have since not shopped at that location. We felt as though we were discrimination against because of the way we act, or appear. I bring this issue up, so that the same issue, does not happen again to another customer, and they do not feel the same embarrassment that we felt. We honestly had no intentions of stealing a thing, and I hope this letter helps you realize the importance of good customer service, so that your store can maintain the reputation of good clothes for good prices, and great customer service.

Mahalo,
Destrie Ranon

Journal #18- Angry Letter Topic

Angry Letter:

Jeans Warehouse- judging teens on how they appear
Furloughs- grades getting worst from less teaching days

Journal#16- Risky Business Essay Draft

In our society today, it's not rare to have issues in many teenage relationships. These issues can vary, from small issues such as someone forgetting a 4 month anniversary, or huge issues like, abuse. Unfortunately, verbal,emotional, and physical abuse occurs in many relationships. Although abuse is wrong, because of the pressure from their partners, victims believe the abuse in their relationship is their fault, so they don't recognize the cycle of abuse and don't remove themselves from the relationship. 

 In teen relationships, it is not unlikely that abuse is present. The abuser has different methods of abusing their partner.  Abusers have a cycle of abuse that they follow. The cycle starts with the "honeymoon" phase. The couple seems to be "in love" and their relationship is perfect! The next phase is the "tension-building" phase. This phase is when the couple starts getting into small arguments over minor things, causing the abuser to become very frustrated. As time goes on, the abuser begin to blame everything on the victim causing more and more tension between the couple. The last, and most 

harmful stage is the "raging stage." This stage is when the abuser explodes on the victim, hurting the victim sexually,physically, emotionally, or verbally. After the abuse happens, the abuser goes back to the "honeymoon" phase, claiming they will change, and didn't mean what they did. They will use pressure and guilt to keep the victim from leaving the relationship, and their persuasion eventually works, and the victim stays in the relationship. From there, the cycle repeats

itself in the relationship, until someone finally ends the relationship. 

It is true that this cycle is reasonably easy to recognize and has many red flags, for a victim to recognize, giving themselves time to get out of the relationship. But the fact is, because of the pressure from their partner, victims don't see the cycle. When the victim is pressured, they cannot get themselves out of the relationship. The abuser in the relationship uses guilt  and threats to keep the victim in the relationship. Although some would say that regardless of pressure, the victim should remove themselves from the relationship immediately. But doing so is not as simple, as it may seem. Unless the victim knows the cycle of abuse, and knows how to resist the abusers guilt, then the cycle and abuse will continue, and abuse in teen relationships will remain to frequently occur.

"Journal #15"- Risky Business info!

Revised Thesis:

Because of the pressure from their partners, victims believe the abuse in their relationship is their fault, so they don't remove themselves from the relationship.

Con:
If the victim feels they are being abused they should remove themselves from the relationship, and not care about the pressure from their partner.

Pro 1:
Victims cannot always remove themselves from the relationship, because the pressure from their partner is too strong. They use things like threatening and guilt to keep the victim in the relationship.

Pro 2:
Because of the pressure from their partner, the victim cannot recognize the cycle of abuse their partner has. When the abuser has the cycle of abuse, the victim is somewhat brainwashed(pressured) into believing they are not being abused, and doesn't see the cycle of abuse.